one windy night a family set of to the airport. when they got there they had to pass security can I see your passport he said .yes said the mum they show the passports the man said you are all good to go they all set of to go on the plane. when they get on the plane the little boy was scared it was his first time on a plane .then there was turbulence the hole plane was shaking boom the table fell .Every thing was going every were there was screaming then the plane slowly started to fall boom the plane hit the ground smash
Hey Emmie,
I really liked your story because at the end there was a bit of action and you used some describing words.
I think that the ‘DADWAVERS’ techniques that you used were action, verbs & some adverbs.
A few things that you may like to consider next time you do the challenge is when someone is speaking you use speech marks and put capital letters at the start of sentences.
Over all I really enjoyed reading your story and hope to see your writing again soon.
Kind Regards
Aynslee 😍💕💖✔✔